Question

圖片中一位老人在小河邊為滿臉淚痕的孫子洗臉。請你對圖片內容用英語進行描述并談自己對留守兒童這一現象的感受。字數為100個詞左右。

Answer 1

One possible version:
I was shocked by the picture at first sight. In the picture, by a small river, a little boy had tears on his lovely face and an old man, maybe his grandfather, was wiping his tears. From the clothes they are wearing we can see that they are poor. The boy was sad. Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home and the boy is missing them day and night?
I think so. At present, many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family. These parents have no choice. I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.

試題分析：本篇作文主要是看圖作文，高中英語的看圖作文寫作有4個要求，3個步驟。這4個要求是：1、要點齊全；2、結構連貫；3、用詞準確多樣；4、書寫整潔標準。3個步驟是：1、畫出圖片中的要點；2、將要點用英語表達出來，表達的時候要注意用多樣的詞匯來表達類似的意思，以及注意長短句相結合，善用連接詞；3、最后寫在卷子上，注意書寫工整。
圖片清晰，學生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。考生在寫作之前必修認真審題，首先要注意文章的時態，要求是對學生日常生活中存在的留守兒童現象給予關注，所以要用一般現在時。要求讓你留守兒童的感受，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據圖片描述圖片中的老人與兒童而已，應該注意聯想到孩子的家庭狀況，什么原因使他們獨自在家----那是因為父母離開家到外面打工掙錢以至于孩子日日思念，但為了謀生其父母不得不這樣做，最后要注意用一些連接詞把句子銜接起來，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如had tears on his lovely face，wiping his tears，I think so, far away from home，missing them，day and night，help these parents get back home ，at first sight還運用了表語從句Is it because his parents are working in a place far away from home; 句子many parents leave their children at home in order to support their family.中引用in order to 引導目的狀語；賓語從句I hope something can be done to help these parents get back home as soon as possible.
等等。并注意了句子的銜接如： In order to，I think so. because等等。