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15．近年，幸福觀的討論引起了社會廣泛關注．那么，幸福究竟是什么？巧的是，你的英語課本中有一個單元涉及到這個話題，該單元的Project部分要求學生制作一個Happiness Handbook，請根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇短文，以裝訂到你們小組的Happiness Handbook里．
提示：有人說，幸福是獲取（錦衣美食，家人朋友的呵護，…）
有人說，幸福是給予（幫助別人，奉獻社會，…）
我認為…
注意：
第一節(jié) 對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯；
第二節(jié) 詞數(shù)120左右．開頭已寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；
第三節(jié) 文中不得提及個人身份信息（如真實姓名，學校名稱等．
Recently，different surveys as to what happiness is have been conducted on different media，which has raised wide public concern．What is happiness？Different people have different ideas．

Answer 1

分析 本文屬于半開放式作文同時也是議論文，要求學生就"什么是幸福？"展開討論．應該使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時為主的時態(tài)．要點：1．有人說，幸福是獲取（錦衣美食，家人朋友的呵護，…）2．有人說，幸福是給予（幫助別人，奉獻社會，…） 3．我認為…開始在不同的觀點后可以適當添加個人觀點，如：幸福就是做好自己的本職工作，做一個對社會和家庭有益的人．建議文章分成三部分，重點在最后一部分展開詳細敘述．
    亮點部分     本篇范文結(jié)構完整，層次分明．文章涵蓋了文字提示要求的所有要點，在每一個要點中都有非常好的添加，全文沒有中國式英語句式，體現(xiàn)了很好的駕馭英語的能力．學生對于寫作技巧的運用較好，文章中多次使用了高級句式，如定語從句和動名詞作表語：To some people，happiness is having things that make life comfortable and pleasurable，such as beautiful clothes，yummy food and trendy gadgets．Happiness is being surrounded by family and friends，being loved and cared for and appreciated by others．讓步狀語從句They always think of how to help others and how to contribute to society，no matter how insignificant they are and how little they can do．等等．

解答 Recently，different surveys as to what happiness is have been conducted on different media，which has raised wide public concern．（高級句式）What is happiness？Different people have different ideas．
Recently，different surveys as to what happiness is have been conducted on different media，which has raised wide public concern．（高級句式）What is happiness？Different people have different ideas．
To some people，happiness is having things that make life comfortable and pleasurable，such as beautiful clothes，yummy food and trendy gadgets．（高級句式）Happiness is being surrounded by family and friends，being loved and cared for and appreciated by others．（高級句式）
To some people，happiness means giving．They always think of how to help others and how to contribute to society，no matter how insignificant they are and how little they can do．（高級句式）They are willing to do everything they can to free others from trouble．
To me，the secret to happiness is simple．I'm happy when I'm with my family，talking about what happened at school，helping with housework or simply sitting with them watching tv for a while．I'm happy if I accomplish something，anything，answering a question correctly in class，handing in my project by the deadline or helping a classmate with a math problem．（高級句式）To me，happiness is a choice，an attitude．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實 的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．