Question

假如你是李華，英國交換生Anna將來你校學(xué)習(xí)中文并住在你家（幸福路58號）, 請你應(yīng)她的要求，根據(jù)下圖介紹你家周邊的情況，以便她初步了解在中國的生活。

注意;
1. 詞數(shù)100左右；
2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)使行文連貫；
3. 開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計
入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Anna,
I am so happy to learn you are coming to study in our school and stay at my home.
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I can’t wait to see you in China.
Yours
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Anna,
I am so happy to learn you are coming to study in our school and stay at my home.
My home is at No.58, Xingfu Road, just opposite a bank. A five-minute walk from my home along Xingfu Road westward will bring you to a crossroads, where Xingfu Road meets Youyi Street. On the southeast corner of the crossroads lies a shopping mall, where you can get everything you need. Walk north for about 300 meters, along Youyi Street, and you’ll see our school on the right. There we will spend most of the daytime. At the east end of Xingfu road stands the new railway station and it’s easy to reach, as a bus stop is just next to my home and No.26 or No.46 bus will directly take you there.
I can’t wait to see you in China.
Yours
Li Hua

試題分析：這是圖表類的作文，要求根據(jù)地圖表達出李華家的地址，因為沒有漢語解釋，考生只有具有扎實的語言基礎(chǔ)知識能夠靈活運用語言的交際性、邏輯性和變通性才能組織出一篇優(yōu)秀的書面表達。圖表題不象文字表述題和看圖作文題形象直觀、要點明了它需要考生通過觀察和分析圖表提煉要點然后組織表達材料。一篇初步完成的語篇還要經(jīng)過修改和審閱才能最后定稿。怎樣修改一方面平時養(yǎng)成寫后復(fù)審自校的習(xí)慣另一方面還要掌握一些修改自校的方法。比如1、詞法、句法有無問題2、要點和細(xì)節(jié)有無遺漏3、拼寫、標(biāo)點有無錯誤4、字?jǐn)?shù)是否符合要求等等。
【亮點說明】文章簡潔的總結(jié)了所給材料，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫，句式多變：My home is at No.58, Xingfu Road, just opposite a bank. A five-minute walk from my home along Xingfu Road westward will bring you to a crossroads, where Xingfu Road meets Youyi Street. 這句話用了定語從句，On the southeast corner of the crossroads lies a shopping mall, where you can get everything you need. 這句話用了定語從句和倒裝句，Walk north for about 300 meters, along Youyi Street, and you’ll see our school on the right. 這句話用了固定句型， At the east end of Xingfu road stands the new railway station and it’s easy to reach, as a bus stop is just next to my home and No.26 or No.46 bus will directly take you there.這句話也用了倒裝句。