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1．假設你是李華，端午節放假期間和家人一起到天龍山國家森林公園（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩過程中發現了一些令你不滿意的地方，請你就此用英語給該景區主管部門的負責人寫一封信，投訴相關問題．內容包括：
1．問題：私家車和單車亂停放；小販（vendor）圍住游客兜售商品；地上有亂扔的果皮，塑料袋，包裝紙等各種垃圾；廁所不干凈，有異味；路口指引標志不清晰；游客太多．
2．你的建議：…（建議一、兩條即可）
注意：1．寫作內容請勿超出作文紙所限范圍，超出部分無效；
2．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭和結尾已給出．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I am writing to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
Thank you for your consideration
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息假設你是李華，端午節放假期間和家人一起到天龍山國家森林公園（Tianlongshan National Forest Park）游玩，在游玩過程中發現了一些令你不滿意的地方，請你就此用英語給該景區主管部門的負責人寫一封信，投訴相關問題，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：問題：私家車和單車亂停放；小販（vendor）圍住游客兜售商品；地上有亂扔的果皮，塑料袋，包裝紙等各種垃圾；廁所不干凈，有異味；路口指引標志不清晰；游客太多．你的建議：…（建議一、兩條即可）2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：make a complaint抱怨；as well as也，和；pay a visit to拜訪；However然而；get rid of去除，擺脫；Hardly…when一…就；Apart from出…之外；Needless to say無需多說；look forward to盼望；
This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）
As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）
Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）
I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am writing to you to make a complaint．This Dragon Boat Festival holiday I，as well as my family with great expectations of relaxing and enjoying ourselves，paid a visit to the famous tourist attraction，Tianlongshan National Forest Park．（高分句型一）However，I felt very disappointed at what I had experienced there．
       As we got closer to the park，we found it more difficult for us to move forward，as many drivers parked their cars where they shouldn't park and cyclists put their bikes wherever they could，which badly blocked the way to the park．（高分句型二）Hardly had we got off the coach when we were surrounded by the vendors，whom we could hardly get rid of，trying their best to sell their goods．（高分句型三）To my relief，we finally managed to reach the forest area，and the fresh air and beautiful scenery there made me intoxicated．But the rubbish，such as fruit skins，food packages and plastic bags thrown here and there by tourists spoiled the view and my good mood．What's worse，the toilets are dirty and stinky．Apart from that，too many people and confusing road signs exhausted me and my patience．
      Needless to say，it's time to take actions immediately to improve the unsatisfying conditions．I think，for example，more workers should be arranged to solve the problems of disorderly parking，and perhaps selling tickets online in advance is a good way to avoid the park being too crowded．（高分句型四）I hope in the near future the National Forest Park will become true to its name．I look forward to your reply．
       Thank you for your consideration．
                                                                                                                                                                                         Sincerely yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．