Question

11．請根據以下信息，為英語校報寫一篇稿件，介紹你（李華）參加班級組織的徒步活動的情況．
介紹活動主要經過；
參加這項活動的感受（享受大自然，強身健體，學會互助，放松心情，利于學習）
要求：1）句子結構嚴謹，信息內容完整，篇章連貫．
2）字數100個字左右．開頭已給出
Last Sunday，we went hiking．Early in the morning．we gathered at the school gate at 6 and headed for theSunshine Mountain．Our goal was to reach the top，so we could see the beautiful view．The hike was exhausting and the heat drained our energy．When we finally reached our destination，the whole view was breathtaking．
It was well worth the extra effort because we not onlygot relaxed by enjoying the beauty of nature but also we learned how to smoothaway difficulties，help each other as well as build ourbodies．
In the near future，we each will have our own mountain toclimb．Let's go forward and set a greater goal and aim at ahigher top of the mountain in our life．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據所提供的材料，寫一篇稿件，介紹你參加班級組織的徒步活動的情況．寫作要點包括：介紹活動主要經過；參加這項活動的感受（享受大自然，強身健體，學會互助，放松心情，利于學習）．寫作時應以一般過去時和一般現在時為主．人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主．重要短語：at the school gate （在校門口），headed for sp （前往某處），drain one's energy（耗盡某人的精力），be well worth…（很值得…），smooth away difficulties （消除困難）．

解答 Early in the morning，we gathered at the school gate at 6 and headed for theSunshine Mountain．Our goal was to reach the top，so we could see the beautiful view．【高分句型】The hikewas exhausting and the heat drained our energy．When wefinally reached our destination，the wholeview was breathtaking．（活動的經過）
It was well worth theextra effort because we not only got relaxed by enjoying the beauty of naturebut also we learned how to smooth away difficulties，help each other as well as build our bodies．【高分句型】（活動的感受：享受大自然，強身健體，學會互助，放松心情，有利于學習）
        In the near future，we each will have our own mountain toclimb．Let's go forward and set a greater goal and aim at ahigher top of the mountain in our life．（結尾---總結概括）

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內容是否包含了所有要點，并適當增加細節．寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．