One day, OuYang’s mum was talking with his teacher. When the teacher asked OuYang’s mum what shortcomings he had, the mother talked a lot. While being asked about her son’s advantages, she kept silent, not knowing what to say.
The picture reflects a real problem in our daily family life. The parents try to satisfy their children physically, arranging everything for their children. As a result, they expect their children should get good marks in return. They think the children must follow their advice, no matter whether it is suitable to their children. However, when children don’t obey their will or can’t live up to their expectations, they will complain a lot. In a word, too much and little communication make the love selfish.
In my opinion, parents should communicate with their children as much as possible. Only in this way can children and parents understand each other. I believe mutual understanding and toleration can make them both happy.
試題分析:這是一篇看圖寫作,按照題目要求要先介紹圖畫內容,然后發表自己的感想,做題時首先認真讀圖,讀懂圖畫所要表達的含義,而不是介紹圖畫表面的內容,這要求學生有一定的歸納能力,第二部介紹自己對這種現象的感想,在把握了文章的中心后,應在內心構思一個基本的框架,并考慮使用恰當的詞語、短語和句型,以充分地表達文章的內容。要注意使用適當的連接詞語或過渡性語句,不至于讓讀者覺得文章中出現跳躍現象,更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。
【亮點說明】所給范文條理清晰,語言簡潔,應用了一些較好的短語和句子:arranging everything for 為…安排一切,As a result因此, live up to 達到…的標準,in return做為回報, in a word總之,一句話, as much as possible盡可能多的. When the teacher asked OuYang’s mum what shortcomings he had, the mother talked a lot. 這句話使用了賓語從句,While being asked about her son’s advantages, she kept silent, not knowing what to say.這句話使用了非謂語動詞, They think the children must follow their advice, no matter whether it is suitable to their children.這句話使用了讓步狀語從句, Only in this way can children and parents understand each other. 這句話使用了倒裝句。