Question

【題目】假設你的朋友李華認為自己有點超重。作為好友，請你用英語給她/他寫一個E-mail,建議她/他用適當的方法來減肥。

E-mail應該包括下列內容：

1、減肥的方法：每天運動，適當節食……

2、避免（avoid doing sth.)使用減肥藥，不食用垃圾食品……

注意：1、E-mail的開頭和結尾已經為你寫好。

2、詞數：100左右。

3、可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。

Dear Li Hua

You say you want to lose weight but you are not sure how to do it correctly.

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Best wishes

Deng Ping

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Li Hua

You say you want to lose weight but you are not sure how to do it correctly.

I believe doing regular exercise is a good way to lose weight. It is important that you should do some sports for an hour every day. You may choose to do some running, play basketball, go swimming or go to a gym. You can also go for a long walk after supper.

At the same time, a balanced diet is also very helpful. You are supposed to have more fruits and vegetables and you’d better not eat any junk food, such as hamburgers and potato chips. They contain lots of fat in them. You should also avoid eating sweet foods. There is one more important thing to remember: it is not safe to take weight-loss pills, which have side-effects and do harm to your health.

I am sure you will feel better and look better in a few months if you keep regular exercise and go on a diet long enough.

Best wishes

Deng Ping

【解析】首先審題，假設你的朋友李華認為自己有點超重。作為好友，請你用英語給她/他寫一個E-mail,建議她/他用適當的方法來減肥。任務中給出的提示信息包含如下內容：簡述丟失和找回錢包的過程。抓住了這亮點，我們就抓住了文章的核心內容。其次選用正確的人稱和時態，考慮用一般過去時，第一人稱來寫。然后寫出單個句子，使用正確的連詞，連句成段。具體來說，寫這篇文章時，要注意:1、減肥的方法：每天運動，適當節食……

2、避免（avoid doing sth.)使用減肥藥，不食用垃圾食品……可分四個自然段來寫：第一自然段說明自己寫信的目的；第二自然段說明運動減肥是一種很有效的方法；第三自然段說明均衡的飲食也很有益；第四自然段相信自己的好朋友會減肥成功。這篇文章對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，不能出現文章脫節問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點說明】本篇書面表達要點全面，結構緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語，為文章增色不少，如: At the same time同時，be supposed to應該。還使用了賓語從句I believe doing regular exercise is a good way to lose weight.和賓語從句I am sure you will feel better and look better in a few months if you keep regular exercise and go on a diet long enough.等多種句式結構，增加了文章的可讀性。