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17．假如你是初三學生李華，在初三緊張的學習生活中，你感受到了父母對你濃濃的愛．請根據以下要點提示，向你的美國朋友Tom寫一封信．
1．成績并不優異，但父母一直鼓勵完；
2．父母在其他方面對你的關愛（自擬兩點）；
3．表達對父母的感激之情；
4．請對方回信，談談自己的父母．
具體要求：
1．所寫內容必須包括上面提示的所有要點，可適當發揮，但不要逐字翻譯；
2．詞數：100個詞左右，開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數；
3．語句通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，字跡工整；
4．文中不得出現真實校名、姓名等其它信息，否則，不予評分．
DearTom，
     How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am underpressure．
（成績并不優異，但父母一直鼓勵）I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（父母在生活上對我的照顧）Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me．They look after me as well as they can．（父母對我的精神上的鼓勵）Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．
（父母在其他方面對你的關愛）Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents．
（請對方回信） Please write soon and tell me about your parents．
Yours sincerely，

                                                                 Yours sincerely
                                                                      Li  Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文，要求是向你的美國朋友Tom寫一封信說說父母對你濃濃的愛．寫作要點是四點，1．成績并不優異，但父母一直鼓勵；2．父母在其他方面對你的關愛（自擬兩點）；3．表達對父母的感激之情；4．請對方回信，談談自己的父母，人稱以第一人稱為主來寫，時態以一般現在時為主．
重點短語和句型：encourage sb to do sth鼓勵某人去做某事，go out of one's way to do sth不辭辛苦做某事，pay attention to注意等等

解答 Dear Tom，
   How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am under pressure．
   I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（成績并不優異，但父母一直鼓勵） Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me（高分句型）．They look after me as well as they can．（父母在生活上對我的照顧）
Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．（父母對我的精神上的鼓勵）
   Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents（父母在其他方面對你的關愛）（高分句型）．
   Please write soon and tell me about your parents．（請對方回信）                                                               Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點評 本文是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經給出．寫作時先要圍繞這些要點組織材料，確定寫作內容，注意將這些要點全部表達出來，并且要有適當的發揮，在談到自己的觀點時，要結合活動內容，寫出自己的觀點．