Question

假設(shè)今天是7月12日，星期六，天氣晴朗，你和全班同學(xué)到南郊公園游玩。 請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，以日記的形式記敘今天你的出游情況。

1.       上午乘車1小時(shí)到達(dá)目的地，爬山，唱歌 ， 做游戲。

2.       中午吃完飯午餐后組織一個(gè)小活動(dòng)，向游客宣傳環(huán)保的重要性

3.       下午4點(diǎn)返回

注意：1.詞數(shù) 100 左右

      2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Today I went on a trap to Nanjiao Park with all my classmates .After an hour ‘s ride, we arrived there. As soon as we got there, we began to climb the hill . All the way up , we sang happily. On the top of the hill, we played some interesting games . All of us enjoyed ourselves very much.

    After we had our picnic at noon we organized an activity, talking to the visitors about the importance of protecting the environment. At about 4 in the afternoon we returned.

 We not only had a good time but also did a good deed today. Though I am tired now ,I feel quite happy.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是日記題材，學(xué)生很容易能把握寫(xiě)作要求與目的。考生在寫(xiě)作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，首先注意作文時(shí)態(tài)，用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，并且用第一人稱。再有注意不能逐句翻譯，注意句子之間的銜接，句法流暢，邏輯關(guān)系嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】 文中 用了很多非常好的短語(yǔ) ，如as soon as ,not only ,but also,enjoy oneself 等。還運(yùn)用了though引導(dǎo)狀語(yǔ)從句，talking to 做伴隨狀語(yǔ)。使文章的結(jié)構(gòu)更加緊湊，更有邏輯性。并且文章還運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯如 importance ,environment, return, 為文章增色不少，提高文章檔次。

考點(diǎn)： 提綱類作文