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18．隨著高考的結束，你即將升入高三，期末考試也接踵而至，家長和老師的殷切期望，能否實現自己的目標等，給你的身心造成了巨大的壓力（煩躁，失眠，精神萎靡…），因此你寫電子郵件向老師求助，你的郵件應含有：
1．情況描述2．求助內容3．約定交流時間和地點
注意：1．字數100左右
2．可適當增加細節以使行文連貫
3．請以規范圓體書寫，你的書寫直接影響你的作文分數3分．
Dear Ms/Mrs XX．，
My name isXX．I'm writing a letter to you to ask for some help．I have met many difficulties in my study．First，with thefinal examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）Second，my parents and teachers have a high expectation on me，which makes me feel great pressure．As a result，I doublt whether I can achieve my goal at last．
Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）Would you like to tell me how toreduce the pressureon me？I'm so puzzled right now and don't know what to do next．I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your officeat 8：00 PM this Friday．（高分句型三）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely
XX．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息隨著高考的結束，你即將升入高三，期末考試也接踵而至，家長和老師的殷切期望，能否實現自己的目標等，給你的身心造成了巨大的壓力（煩躁，失眠，精神萎靡…），因此你寫電子郵件向老師求助，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：情況描述；求助內容；約定交流時間和地點
  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：ask for some help尋求幫助；First首先；Second其次；As a result結果是；at last最后；a face-to-face talk 面對面的談話；Look forward to盼望；
First，with the final examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）
Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）
I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your office at 8：00PM this Friday．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Ms/Mrs XX
      My name isXX．I'm writing a letter to you to ask for some help．I have met many difficulties in my study．First，with the final examination approaching，I feel more and more worried every day．（高分句型一）Second，my parents and teachers have a high expectation on me，which makes me feel great pressure．As a result，I doublt whether I can achieve my goal at last．
      Faced with so many difficulties，I have to ask you for some help．（高分句型二）Would you like to tell me how to reduce the pressure on me？I'm so puzzled right now and don't know what to do next．I hope I could have a face-to-face talk with you in your office at 8：00PM this Friday．（高分句型三）
      Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                        XX．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．