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　　1932年居里夫人應(yīng)邀回到家鄉(xiāng)參加會(huì)議。當(dāng)她走進(jìn)會(huì)議大廳時(shí)，兩個(gè)女孩為她獻(xiàn)花。當(dāng)她發(fā)現(xiàn)坐在輪椅里的啟蒙老師時(shí)，她走上前，把鮮花獻(xiàn)給了老師，并把輪椅推到前排，把老師介紹給在場(chǎng)的要。居里夫人不忘老師的行為更加受到人們的尊重。

請(qǐng)以A Respected Scientist為題，用英語寫一篇記敘文。詞數(shù)：120～150。

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A Respected Scientist 　　In 1932，the great scientist Madam Curie was invited for① a public meeting in her hometown．When she entered the meeting hall，two girls came to her and presented fresh flowers．The crowd cheered and welcome②her．Suddenly she saw an old white-haired woman in a wheel-chair．She went up to the old woman and put her arm③around her neck and gave the flowers to her． Then Madam Curie pushed the wheel-chair to the front row of④hall and introduced her to the people．She said，“ I'll always remember this old woman as one of my first teachers． She led me through darkness to learn about the world．”⑤Those words won the praise of all the people there．Madam Curie was a great scientist，⑥she respected her first teacher．Therefore，Madam Curie herself is remembered by people all over the world． 　　修改：①for→to　與invite連用的介詞常用to。 　　②welcome→welcomed　cheered和welcomed是兩個(gè)并列的謂語動(dòng)詞，故用動(dòng)詞的一般過去式。 　　③arm→arms　根據(jù)上下文，此處最好用名詞的復(fù)數(shù)形式。 　　④of→of the　hall前應(yīng)加定冠詞，表特指。 　　⑤此句寫得精彩！不但用詞準(zhǔn)確，而且淋漓盡致地表達(dá)了對(duì)老師的贊頌。 　　⑤she→but she　加上連詞but后，可使上下旬語意連接得更緊湊。 　　評(píng)點(diǎn)：本篇習(xí)作語言通順，生動(dòng)地描寫了一位偉大的科學(xué)家尊重教師的感人場(chǎng)景，很有教育意義。文中使用presented fresh flowers，introduced her to the people和被動(dòng)語態(tài)等較高級(jí)的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，是一篇好作文。