Question

假設你是李華，前兒天你參加了 Cloud Travel Agency組織的長白山三日游。下面是該旅行社的廣告，請根據下面廣告中箭頭所指內容對其不實之處向消費者協會寫一封投訴信。

注意：
1.   詞數100左右;
2.   可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；
3.   信的開頭和結尾已為你寫好。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to express my complaint about the service of Cloud Travel Agency. ______________________________________________________________________________
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Regards,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to express my complaint about the service of Cloud Travel Agency.
A few days ago, I joined a three-day trip to Changbai Mountain with this travel agency. I found a few differences between their ads and action.
As they say, they provide a large air-conditioned bus, but we only rode in a shabby bus without any air-conditioner. Yes, they served us lunch, but the food tasted terrible, some even with sand. We didn’t enjoy any kind of shower; we only bathed in cold water. As for sightseeing, the guides led us to several expensive souvenir shops, which wasted us much time. As a result, two scenery spots were left unseen in the end.
We do hope something can be done to prevent such things happening again.
Regards,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應用文中的書信的寫作。根據下面廣告中箭頭所指內容對其不實之處向消費者協會寫一封投訴信。要點是以該旅行社的廣告呈現出來的，動筆前要好好審題，仔細的閱讀旅行社的廣告會發現有4點和實際不符合，要把要點說明清楚，審題時注意本文使用一般過去式，描述要點時要運用合適的語法規則和詞匯把各要點都準確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用省略句，倒裝句和強調句型準確表述。As they say, they provide a large air-conditioned bus, but we only rode in a shabby bus without any air-conditioner.和As for sightseeing, the guides led us to several expensive souvenir shops, which wasted us much time.這兩句話寫得都很好。
點評：考查應用文關鍵在于審題，全面包括要點。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，還有運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。