Question

10．請根據以下提示，并結合具體事例，用英語寫一篇短文．
Failure is annoying，but what failure can teach us may never be taught in other ways．
注意：①無須寫標題；
②除詩歌外，文體不限；
③內容必須結合你生活中的具體事例；
④文中不得透露個人姓名和學校名稱；
⑤詞數不少于120，如引用提示語則不計入總詞數．

Answer 1

分析 失敗是令人厭煩的，但是失敗對我們的教育意義是無法替代的．根據提示，并結合具體事例，用英語寫一篇短文．無須寫標題；除詩歌外，文體不限；內容必須結合你生活中的具體事例；文中不得透露個人姓名和學校名稱；詞數不少于120，如引用提示語則不計入總詞數．不要出現標點和拼寫錯誤，盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性．
亮點說明：范文中對于英文提示換了一種表達方式，但是達到了同樣的效果．failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．多種形式表達同一種意思，避免重復，符合題目要求，可以使文章變化多樣，避免單調乏味，更重要的是起到啟下的作用；范文中使用了較多的語法知識，原因狀語從句as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are，時間狀語從句When I was in Junior High School，動作分詞做狀語saying that it promised a better future，定語從句the fact that I was not good at Physics，強調句It was only two months later that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese．原因狀語從句、時間狀語從句、動作分詞做狀語、定語從句、強調句等語法的使用提升了文章的檔次，同時也顯示較高的語法知識點使用能力；范文中注意使用了extremely，immediately等副詞，switched，witness等動詞，顯示了豐富的詞匯量，表意更精準，提升了文章的檔次；范文中使用了一些固定短語：promise a better future，follow this trend，be good at，lay in等，豐富了文章的內容，使文章更加充實完整．
     No one can ever achieve any success without failure，as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．（高分句型一）
    When I was in Junior High School，most of my teachers and students thought it better to study science，saying that it promised a better future．（高分句型二）
    It was only two months later，when I failed an extremely important Physics exam，that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese，English as well as History．（高分句型三）

解答 No one can ever achieve any success without failure，as failure can usually help us learn what our strengths and weaknesses are．（高分句型一）
      When I was in Junior High School，most of my teachers and students thought it better to study science，saying that it promised a better future．（高分句型二）I tried to follow this trend despite the fact that I was not good at Physics．It was only two months later，when I failed an extremely important Physics exam，that I realized my talent lay in subjects like Chinese，English as well as History．（高分句型三）I switched for arts immediately．
      The following years witnessed my excellent school performance then．So failure is not as terrible as we have expected as long as we can learn something from it．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．