Question

近年來(lái)，高中生在校外租房子的現(xiàn)象比較普遍，請(qǐng)結(jié)合以下要點(diǎn)談?wù)勛约旱挠^點(diǎn)。

贊同：	1. 自由，無(wú)紀(jì)律約束；
2. 有更多的隱私權(quán)。
反對(duì)：	1. 寢室有時(shí)雖然有點(diǎn)吵，但方便；
2. 能培養(yǎng)交際能力；
3. 能了解生活的價(jià)值，培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立能力。
自己的觀點(diǎn)：	……

注意：1. 詞數(shù)120左右；

2．文章的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

3．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

4. 參考詞匯：寢室：dormitory;  隱私權(quán)：privacy

In recent years, it’s common for high school students to rent houses outside. Different students have different opinions.

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

In recent years, it’s common for high school students to rent houses outside. Different students have different opinions.

Some students think that they prefer to live outside alone. Apart from the freedom of the school rules, they can do whatever they like, such as staying up late, reading books or even surfing the Internet. What’s more, it can give them more privacy.

Others hold an opposite view that it’s not worthwhile tenting house outside. Despite the fact that sometimes it’s noisy to live in dormitories, it actually bring much convenience. Living in school can make us develop the ability of how to communicate with others. In addition, we can also learn the value of life, thus building up self-independence.

As far as I’m concerned, we students should treasure the opportunity to spend the rest time together in school.

【解析】

試題分析：作文是常見(jiàn)的材料作文，要求寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于高中生在外租房子的作文。材料以表格的形式呈現(xiàn)，清晰明了，學(xué)生容易構(gòu)思。作文可以分三部分來(lái)寫(xiě)，即贊同者的觀點(diǎn)；反對(duì)者的觀點(diǎn)和自己的觀點(diǎn)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要包含所有要點(diǎn)，給出的詞匯必須用上；注意短語(yǔ)段之間的連貫，不能生搬硬套，逐句翻譯。盡量使用高級(jí)詞匯和重點(diǎn)詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)、句型等語(yǔ)法知識(shí)要正確，語(yǔ)言要得體。另外，拼寫(xiě)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)不容小覷，避免拼錯(cuò)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)用錯(cuò)，給閱卷老師留下不好的印象。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文分別介紹了贊同者、反對(duì)者和自己的觀點(diǎn)，作文結(jié)構(gòu)比較明確。范文使用了such as, What’s more, In addition, thus, As far as I’m concerned等連接上下句和前后文，使作文比較連貫，銜接緊密。范文運(yùn)用短語(yǔ)prefer to, Apart from, how to do sth, communicate with等，使作文內(nèi)容充實(shí)。范文使用了賓語(yǔ)從句think that they prefer to live outside alone, they can do whatever they like和同位語(yǔ)從句hold an opposite view that it’s..., Despite the fact that sometimes it’s...an opposite view that和固定句型be worthwhile doing，和非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞Living in school can...等，顯示了對(duì)語(yǔ)法知識(shí)的靈活運(yùn)用能力。

考點(diǎn)：材料類作文