Question

近日你的外國朋友Mike寫信向你咨詢H7N9禽流感的事情并詢問該如何預(yù)防禽流感，請你根據(jù)以下信息寫信告訴他:

H7N9禽流感是一種禽類傳染疾病，癥狀是高熱、咳嗽和呼吸困難, 但可防可治：

1. 勤洗手;

2. 每天打開門窗通風(fēng)一到兩次；

3. 不要接觸病的或病死的家禽和畜類,肉類一定要煮熟后吃；

4. 經(jīng)常鍛煉身體，增強(qiáng)個人體質(zhì)；

5. 有癥狀時及時就醫(yī)。

【寫作要求】

只能使用5個句子表達(dá)全部內(nèi)容。回信的開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計入5個句數(shù)內(nèi)。

【參考詞匯】

傳染infect  禽類 poultry  畜類cattle   咳嗽 cough

Dear Mike,

I am glad to hear from you again. In your last letter, you asked me about H7N9 avian influenza and how to prevent ourselves falling into such a disease. Now let me tell you something about it. ___________________________________________________________     ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Best wishes to you!

                                                        Yours,

                                                              Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mike,

I am glad to hear from you again. In your last letter, you asked me about H7N9 avian influenza and how to prevent ourselves falling into such a disease. Now let me tell you something about it. H7N9 avian influenza is a disease spreading among poultry, but it is also a disease which can be prevented. First of all, we should form a good habit of washing hands. Secondly, we should open the windows and doors for fresh air once or twice a day. Thirdly, do not have a close contact with sick poultry or cattle and also keep away from poultry or cattle that have died of diseases; besides, meat can not be eaten until it is fully cooked. Last but not the least, we should take exercise from time to time to build up our bodies and see the doctor as soon as possible if we have the symptoms of high fever, cough and breathing difficulty.

Best wishes to you!

                                                        Yours,

                                                              Li Hua

 

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，包括以下幾個方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點。尤其是內(nèi)容要點要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，這是提綱作文，要點需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。因為只能使用5個句子表達(dá)全部的內(nèi)容。又要包括所有的要點，考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，一句話中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：we should take exercise from time to time to build up our bodies and see the doctor as soon as possible if we have the symptoms of high fever, cough and breathing difficulty.就包含了幾個要點內(nèi)容。

考點：提綱作文。

點評：作文要層次清晰，要點全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合作文要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語和句子為文章增色，使用高級詞匯及句型。