Question

假設(shè)你是晨光中學(xué)的高中生李華。你校擬選拔一批優(yōu)秀學(xué)生，利用暑期到晨曦希望小學(xué)為學(xué)生輔導(dǎo)英語(yǔ)。你希望參加此活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語(yǔ)給校評(píng)選組寫一封申請(qǐng)信：
● 對(duì)此活動(dòng)的認(rèn)識(shí)（如對(duì)本人、學(xué)生及社會(huì)的益處等）
●個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)（如性格、獨(dú)立生活能力、語(yǔ)言能力等）
●你的計(jì)劃（如怎樣進(jìn)行輔導(dǎo)等）
注意：
1.詞數(shù)不少于100；   2.可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容充實(shí)、行文連貫；
3.信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入詞數(shù)。
參考詞匯： 晨曦希望小學(xué) Chenxi Hope School
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two.                                                                 
                                                                                               
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. As far as I am concerned, I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.
I think I am qualified for being the pupils’ English coach, because I have good character, and I’m independent in life and proficient in English. That’s why I apply for the position. I hope I can join the instructive activity.
My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. I hope you can offer the opportunity.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，要求用英語(yǔ)給學(xué)校寫一封申請(qǐng)信，申請(qǐng)用暑期到晨曦希望小學(xué)為學(xué)生輔導(dǎo)英語(yǔ)。文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，但不是很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)全交代，不能有遺漏。而且要拓展內(nèi)容，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子： As far as I am concerned據(jù)我所知,be qualified for 合格的，I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， That’s why I apply for the position.這句話用了表語(yǔ)從句， My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. 這句話用了不定式做表語(yǔ)。What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. 這句話用了主語(yǔ)從句和現(xiàn)在分詞。