Question

寒假中，你的父母以和你談起報考大學的事兒，請你結合他們的意見和自己的想法寫一篇英語短文，投稿到某中學生英語報，和大家分享你的看法。要點如下：

1、選擇什么樣的大學或專業？

2、選擇的理由？(兩點)

3、最后一個學期的打算？

注意：

1. 詞數：不少于120詞；

2. 開頭已給出，但不計入總詞數；

3. 可適當增加情節，以使行文連貫。

Dear Editor,

I’m writing to share my ideas about my future college or major.

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

I’m writing to share my ideas about my future college or major.

The time is getting closer and closer when I have to make a decision on what kind of college to go. Combining my parents’ advice with my opinion, I think it is a better choice to make foreign language as my major, such as English or German. The reason why I make such a choice is that I’m fond of foreign language very much. I always find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity. What’s more, mastering one or two foreign languages will provide me more chance to travel or learn abroad, which accordingly will broaden my mind.

Therefore, I think I have no choice but to fight for the last battle to realize my dream. I’m determined to meet the possible hardship and challenge in the last term and make it.

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：考官評卷首先會根據文章的內容和語言判定作文所屬的檔次，然后從：內容切題，語言表達準確、多樣、連貫、得體，這幾個方面評定分數。注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結構要恰當，同時要盡量保持簡潔精干的內容，不拖泥帶水。要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，應用文寫作對于文章內容的要求是要達到寫作目的。盡量保持卷面整潔，字體美觀，注意行文的連貫性。

【亮點說明】第二段第一句是一個時間狀語從句和賓語從句的復合句。The time is getting closer and closer when I have to make a decision on what kind of college to go.距離我必須做出上哪樣的大學的決定的時間越來越近。When引導的時間狀語修飾time，what引導的賓語從句修飾decisioin on。第二句首先用了一個分詞做狀語：Combining my parents’ advice with my opinion,結合我父母的建議和我的想法；然后用了形式主語結構 it is。第三句使用了一個原因狀語從句和表語從句的復合句。The reason why I make such a choice is that I’m fond of foreign language very much. 我這樣做決定是因為我非常喜歡外語。I always find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity. 第五句mastering也是現在分詞做伴隨狀語，后半句是which引導的非限制性定語從句，which修飾前面整個句子。What’s more, mastering one or two foreign languages will provide me more chance to travel or learn abroad, which accordingly will broaden my mind.更重要的是，掌握一兩門外語將會給我提供更多出國旅行和學習的機會，這將相應的開闊我的內心。文章除了大量的使用復雜句之外，還是用了一些比較好的短語和結構。高級短語：am fond of 喜歡；find foreign language an attraction to my curiosity發現外語吸引著我的好奇心；What’s more,更重要的是；therefore因此，have no choice but to別無選擇，只能…。這些好的短語結構都為文章增色不少。

考點：考察應用文寫作。