Question

6．假如你是李華，最近你在瀏覽一個新西蘭中學網站時，看到一位名叫Tom的中學生的留言，他計劃在暑假期間到中國的北京旅游，希望能有一名中國留學生做他的導游．你對此很感興趣，請根據以下要點提示寫一封e-mail給他，介紹你的相關情況．
  主要內容包括：
  1．希望做他的導游；    
2．打算如何給他做導游；    
3．期盼他的回復．
  注意：
1．詞數100左右；       
2．可適當增加情節，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭已為你寫好．
Dear Tom，
  Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．____________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely
                                                        Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達是一篇實用文，要求寫一封電子郵件，給出的要點較多，只要稍加發揮想象即可．根據要求和內容來看，包括：1．希望做他的導游；2．打算如何給他做導游；3．期盼他的回復．審題時注意因為是講述自己的計劃打算，所以要使用一般將來時兼顧使用一般現在時．人稱用第一人稱的語氣表達．還應該注意使用較高級的詞匯和句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次．注意字數要求100詞左右．
重要短語：
be willing to do sth樂意做某事，be supposed to do sth應該做某事，For one thing…For another…一方面…，另一方面…，keep sb company doing sth陪伴某人做某事，places of interest風景名勝，look forward to期待，盼望．
高分句型：
1．Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．本句中包含一個while引導的時間狀語從句的省略用法，省略了I was；主句中含有一個省略了引導詞that或者which引導的定語從句you posted on it．
2．I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．本句中包含一個that引導的同位語從句，是your wishes的內容．
3．Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．這句中Learning this news為現在分詞短語作時間狀語．

解答 Dear Tom，
Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．（高分句型）I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．（高分句型）（表達希望）
Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．（高分句型）I know as a brilliant guide I am supposed to make your journey interesting and meaningful．For one thing，I will keep you company visiting numerous great places of interest and enjoy the wonderful sightseeing．For another，I am going to tell you the long and rich history of Beijing．（說明自己的打算）
I am looking forward to the reply from you．With all my wishes you could give me this honor．（表達期盼）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點評 文章結構清楚，層次明確．使用了For one thing，For another，來說明自己做導游的優勢．另外用了am supposed to，keep doing，還運用了-ing形式作狀語，looking forward to；定語從句、同位語從句等短語和較為復雜的表達．此外With all my wishes you could give me this honor．這一經典句子的使用也使文章語言更加委婉禮貌，增加了文章的亮點．