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5．目前我校學(xué)生會提出倡議，為解決早晚上下學(xué)高峰時間校門口的擁堵問題，倡導(dǎo)使用低碳的交通方式．為此，學(xué)生會將舉辦"Let's Ride Bicycles"為主題的倡議活動．請撰寫一份倡議書，主要內(nèi)容包括：
1．目前，汽車帶來的空氣污染和家長開車接送上下學(xué)的弊端，如：校門口的擁堵和容易引起交通事故等問題．
2．騎自行車上學(xué)的益處，如環(huán)保、有利健康，培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立能力等．
注意：
（1）對所給要點逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯．
（2）詞數(shù)150左右．
（3）作文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校和本人姓名．
參考詞匯：低碳生活（low-carbon life）節(jié)能（energy saving）
Good afternoon，everyone，
I am very glad to give a speech here．The topic of my speech is"Let's Ride Bicycles"．
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，給學(xué)生會撰寫一份倡議書．為解決早晚上下學(xué)高峰時間門口的擁堵問題，倡導(dǎo)使用低碳的交通方式．寫作時人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．寫作要點：1．介紹購物情況； 2．反映存在問題； 3．提出解決方案．重要短語：with the improvement of （隨著…的發(fā)展），a popular means of （一個受歡迎的方式），bring great convenienceto …（給…帶來便捷），causesome problems （引起問題），suchas （例如），be crowded with （擠滿），solvethe problems （解決問題），in one's opinion （某人認(rèn)為），environmentally friendly （環(huán)保的），be beneficial to（對…有益），be dependent on （依賴…），take on（呈現(xiàn)，承擔(dān)，具有），take the responsibilityto（承擔(dān)做某事），build up（建立，增強(qiáng)）．
【高分句型】
1．private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringing great convenience to our life．
這里是由現(xiàn)在分詞作結(jié)果狀語，逗號之前是private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringing great convenience to our life是現(xiàn)在分詞作結(jié)果狀語，主句的主語是private cars，與所給動詞bring存在邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
2．And every morning our school gate is always crowded with the cars of parents who drive their sons and daughter to school．
這里是由who引導(dǎo)的定語從句，先行詞是parents，who drive their sons and daughter to school為定語從句，who在從句中作主語．

解答 Good afternoon，everyone，
Iam very glad to give a speech here．The topic of my speech is"Let's Ride Bicycles"．
As we all know，with the improvement of people's livingstandards，private cars have become a popular means of transport，bringinggreat convenience to our life．【高分句型】However，they have also caused some problems such as airpollution and traffic jams．And every morning our school gate is always crowded with the cars of parents who drive their sons and daughter to school．【高分句型】（目前，汽車帶來的空氣污染和家長開車接送上下學(xué)的弊端）
How can we solve the problems？In my opinion，riding bicyclesis a good solution．For one thing，bicycles are energy-saving and environmentally friendly．For another，riding bicycles is a good way for us toexercise and it is beneficial to ourhealth．【高分句型】What's more，riding toschool can also help us less dependent on our parents．（騎自行車的益處）
Ithink the commitment to environmental protection and energy saving is whateveryone should take on．Therefore； let's take the responsibility to build up alow carbon city by riding bicycles．Come on and join us!（總結(jié)）
Thank you!

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．