Question

假如你叫李華，現正在美國加利福尼亞州上大學，你的一個朋友劉英寫信向你了解美國加利福尼亞州的情況，請根據以下內容提示給他回信簡介加利福尼亞州。

 

地理方面	面積42.4萬平方千米，美國西部，西瀕太平洋，美國面積第三大的州
人口方面	約38,000,000人； 據說15000前印第安人首先進入；16世紀歐洲人開始進入；19世紀中世界各地的人帶著發財夢進入；未來將還會有人因喜愛加州的氣候和生活方式進入。
語言方面	58% 的人把英語作為母語來講，42%的人講其它語言。

 

＊加利福尼亞州： California；太平洋：the Pacific；印第安人：Indians

【寫作內容】

請根據以上內容給朋友寫回信，內容包括：

1、加里福尼亞的地理方面的信息;

2、人口及其語言方面的信息;

3、信的開頭和結尾已經給出，不計入句子數。

【寫作要求】

只能用5個句子表達全部內容。

【評分標準】

句子結構準確，信息內容完整，篇章連貫。

Dear Liu Ying,

   Your letter reached me yesterday. You would like me to tell you something about California, so now I am writing to you.

____________________________________________________________________________________________

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If you want to know more, you may go to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/California#History. Best wishes to you.

Yours ever,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

Your letter reached me yesterday. You would like me to tell you something about California, so now I am writing to you.

California, the third largest state in size in the USA with a population of more than 38 million, is located in the west of the United States on the Pacific in the west. It is said that the first settlers were Indians who got there 15000 years ago and only in the 16th century did Europeans come to settle. In the 19th century, people from all over the world came rushing into California with the dream of becoming rich. It is believed that in the future more people, attracted by the climate and lifestyle, will keep immigrating to California. As for language, only 58% of Californians speak English as their native language, while the others speak other languages.

   If you want to know more, you may go to https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/California#History

Best wishes to you.                                                                                                                   Yours ever,

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要仔細審題，要點是以提綱形式出現的，做題時包括以下幾個方面：（1）層次結構（2）句子的時態（3）內容要點。尤其是內容要點要把握準確到位，要點需要考生拿捏準確以及正確，這加大了寫作難度。再者考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當的使用一些高級句式和高級詞匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。因為只能使用5個句子表達全部的內容。又要包括所有的要點，考生要多使用復雜句，一句話中要多包含些信息。

【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如would like sb to do, is located in還運用了It is said that…，It is believed that句式; who引導的定語從句及only in the 16th century did Europeans come to settle.倒裝句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：As for language等等。