Question

假設你叫李華，現是天津大學的一名新生。請你根據以下提示，給你中學的英語老師李老師寫一封感謝信，表達對他的愛戴和尊敬。詞數100左右。

  提示：

  1.對英語李老師教學的評價。

  2．回顧在校時你的心情。

  3．對老師的理解和祝愿。

  信的開頭、結尾已經寫好，但不計入總詞數。

Dear Mr. Li.

I'm very excited to write to…_______________________________________________

_________________________________________________________________________

     Hoping to hear from you soon.

                                                            Yours,

                                                            Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Dear Mr. Li,

    I’m very excited to write to express my thanks to you. I am now a freshman of Nanjin University, which I have been dreaming about. Mr. Li, I still remember the days when you taught me English. My English has been improved greatly because of your creative work. However, at one time, the pressure of examinations, too much homework and the high expectations made me depressed. I was tired of the warning that if I didn’t do my best, I wouldn’t have the chance to go to college. Thanks for your encouragement; if not, I wouldn’t have realized my dream. And now I really understand you. I wish more and more of your students could go to their ideal colleges. Are you still so busy? How I miss you!

Hoping to hear from you soon.

                                                                                          Yours,

                                                                                           Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本書面表達是要求學生寫一封書信，材料非常簡單，學生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。考生在寫作之前必修認真審題，首先要注意文章的時態，首先寫現在的狀況，所以要用一般現在時。回憶過去的狀況和老師的教誨，用一般過去時態。要求讓你給英語老師李老師寫信，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據材料逐字逐句的翻譯應該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。

【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如be excited to，express sth. to sb.，at one time, be tired of, do one’s best, have the chance to do, realize one’s dream, hear from，還運用了wish引導的虛擬語氣和which、when引導的定語從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：because of，however, 等等。

考點：提綱作文