Question

寫作內容：

假如你是李華，在美國留學。你母親今天下午要從國內來看你，但你湊巧要去做個講座，故給你的朋友Peter留下字條請他下午三點半去機場接你母親。因Peter未見過你母親，請根據下表在字條中描述你母親的特征以便他辨認。

 

age	around sixty
appearance	fat, short, gray hair, a long face
clothes	a white blouse, brown trousers
luggage	a yellow suitcase

 

寫作要求：

1．必須使用5個句子介紹全部所給內容；

2．詞數：100詞左右。開頭和結尾已經給出，不計入總詞數。

評分標準：

句子結構的準確性和復雜度；信息內容的完整性和連貫性。

Sunday

Peter,

         I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air.

                                                      

                                                      

                                                      

                                                       

                                                      

                                                      

                                                      

                                                        

I will be grateful to you for your help.

Yours,

 

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

                                                      Sunday

Peter,

　　I am very glad that my mother is coming this afternoon by air. But I have to give a lecture and have no time to meet her. I am writing to ask you to meet my mother at the airport at 3:30 for me. As you have never seen her before, I will say something about her to help you recognize her. She is around sixty years old, fat and short, with a long face and gray hair. I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.

　　I will be grateful to you for your help.

　　                                                  Yours,

 

 

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要仔細審題，包括以下幾個方面：（1）層次結構，（2）句子的時態（3）內容要點。尤其是內容要點要把握準確到位，這是提綱作文，要點需要考生拿捏準確以及正確，考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達形式多樣化，適當的使用一些高級句式和高級詞匯，以提高書面表達的檔次和可讀性。因為只能使用5個句子表達全部的內容。又要包括所有的要點，考生要多使用復雜句，一句話中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：I have been told she is dressed in a white blouse and brown trousers and she will take a yellow suitcase with her.就包含了幾個要點內容。

考點：提綱作文。

點評：作文要層次清晰，要點全面，表達流暢，切合作文要求，句子結構準確，信息內容完整，篇章結構連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語和句子為文章增色，使用高級詞匯及句型。