Question

我最喜歡的老師
作為一名中學(xué)生，你遇到過(guò)許多好的老師，你最喜歡的老師是誰(shuí)？請(qǐng)以My favorite teacher為題，寫(xiě)一篇短文。題目和開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好。
My favorite teacher
In my high school, I have many good teachers, but my English teacher, Mr. Liu, who is about forty yours old, is the one I particularly like and respect.

Answer 1

My favorite teacher
In my high school, I have many good teachers, but my English teacher, Mr. Liu, who is about forty yours old, is the one I particularly like and respect.
He is kind but very strict and has a very special way of teaching. At the beginning of every class, he always tells us some interesting English stories to attract our attention and to make us interested in English. He is so humorous and experienced in teaching that he can make his lessons lively and interesting. When the bell rings to dismiss the class I always feel a bit sorry.
Mr. Liu teaches us how to write in simple, clear and correct English and to make ourselves understood to English speaking people. He takes a personal interest in each of us and has made a deep impression on us all.
Since Mr. Liu began to teach me English I have made rapid progress. I respect him and decide to choose teaching as my career.

試題分析：這是一篇開(kāi)放式作文。它的寫(xiě)作思路與漢語(yǔ)作文非常相似。首先要明確主題，然后根據(jù)主題搭建文章的主體結(jié)構(gòu)，即寫(xiě)作提綱。提綱要突出主題，有層次，先寫(xiě)什么，后寫(xiě)什么要有安排。
本文要求以“我最喜歡的老師”為題寫(xiě)一篇文章，屬一篇寫(xiě)人的記敘文。寫(xiě)的對(duì)象是老師，那么老師受學(xué)生喜歡一般來(lái)說(shuō)源于兩個(gè)方面。一、人品、個(gè)性、人格魅力，二、教學(xué)方面。大方向確定好以后，可以回憶一些描寫(xiě)人物的詞句，然后進(jìn)行組織。
寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，如果寫(xiě)現(xiàn)在的老師 ，則用現(xiàn)在的各種時(shí)態(tài)，寫(xiě)曾經(jīng)的老師則要用過(guò)去的各種時(shí)態(tài)。
由于自由度較大，寫(xiě)作時(shí)一定要注意緊緊圍繞主題。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】
1、文章語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔清楚，表達(dá)時(shí)還又不泛一些較為精彩的句型，如：He is so humorous and experienced in teaching that he can make his lessons lively and interesting.此處的so… that…句型用得恰到好處。
2、情感色彩鮮明。When the bell rings to dismiss the class I always feel a bit sorry.此句一看就知作者是多么地喜歡這個(gè)老師。
3、最后一段寫(xiě)了這位老師對(duì)我的影響大到我決定將來(lái)也做老師，更可看出這篇文章緊緊圍繞主題。