Question

4．假如你是李華，為了進一步提高英語水平并了解西方的文化，你打算利用今年暑假的時間去美國Edward語言學習中心學習英語．請根據下面的提示內容給該中心的負責人Bruce寫一封信，把自己的要求告訴對方，希望盡快得到答復．
①學習內容：英語口語；
②學習方式：最好是討論或社會調查；
③食宿和交通：住在美國家庭，步行去學校，以便熟悉周圍環境；
④學費或其他．
注意：1．詞數不少于100；2．必須包含提示內容；3．請勿提及真實學校名稱；4．可適當加入細節，以使內容充實、行文連貫．
Dear Bruce，
I'd like to study English in your language center this summer vacation．I think it will greatly improve my spoken English and also I'll learn about American culture．Studying in a traditional class in our country，I'd like a change．I think it's better to discuss in class and it'll be interesting to make a survey of society．If I have a chance to stay in an American family，which will be better．（高分句型一）Living there，I can enjoy their culture and foods．I am wondering if I have a chance to live near the language center．If so，I can go to school on foot，which I think it is easy for me to get to know the place quickly．（高分句型二）
Besides，I'd like some information about your fees．I'd be grateful if you give me a hand．Looking forward to your reply．
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
If I have a chance to stay in an American family，which will be better．
如果我有機會住在一個美國家庭的話，那樣對我而言會更好的．
高分句型二：
If so，I can go to school on foot，which I think it is easy for me to get to know the place quickly．
如果是那樣的話，我可以走路去上學，那樣還能幫我更快的熟悉這個地方．
句型一 ①If I have a chance to stay in an American family 該句是一個if引導的條件狀語從句
           ②which will be better．此為which引導的非限制性定語從句，which在句中充當主語，且替代前面整個主句的內容．
句型二 ①If so=If it is so，該句是一個省略句
           ②which I think it is easy for me to get to know the place quickly此為which引導的非限制性定語從句，which在句中充當主語，且替代前面整個主句的內容．
各種從句在句中的正確使用，使得該篇作文表述具有層次，表達更為準確．

解答 Dear Bruce，
    I'd like to study English in your language center this summer vacation．I think it will greatly improve my spoken English and also I'll learn about American culture．Studying in a traditional class in our country，I'd like a change．I think it's better to discuss in class and it'll be interesting to make a survey of society．If I have a chance to stay in an American family，which will be better．（高分句型一）Living there，I can enjoy their culture and foods．I am wondering if I have a chance to live near the language center．If so，I can go to school on foot，which I think it is easy for me to get to know the place quickly．（高分句型二）
    Besides，I'd like some information about your fees．I'd be grateful if you give me a hand．Looking forward to your reply．
    Best wishes!
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點評 該書面表達為提綱類作文，它有一定的文字提示或者說明，要求表達的內容要切合所列舉的條目，寫作時要做到要點表達明確，語言使用準確，簡潔合理，讓人一目了然．