Question

書面表達（滿分25分）

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartp hone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world. Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.

I used to contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with fri ends. I can also receive the latest news by subscribing to famous websites. It makes me feel so connected with the rest of the world.

I am truly grateful for the convenience, connection and comfort brought by this marvelous technology. But meanwhile I feel deeply anxious. To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted. Therefore, we should be cautious not to fall slaves to the smart phones.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達要求就智能手機帶來的影響以及你對這種影響的看法來進行寫作。這個話題接近學生生活，學生可以自由發揮，發揮想象。但是需要自己組織好要點，同時要在謀篇布局上多加考慮，文章的結構層次要分明，脈絡要清晰。在寫作時，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在能力范圍之內，選擇句式時要賦予變化，這樣才可以更好的駕馭。同時也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個要點組織成一個完整的整體。此外，文章要使用第一人稱和一般現在時。

【亮點說明】本篇范文的特點是句式的多變和大量短語的運用，比如used to，subscribe to，switch to,feel connected with , stay informed, be absorbed in 等。句型結構有it做形式主語和過去分詞做狀語，：Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartphone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world.，賓語從句 Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.，定語從句 I contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with friends.和不定式做目的狀語和非限制性定語從句To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted.等，這些都成為文章的亮點所在。

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