Question

20．假定你是來自澳大利亞的高三學生Tom，愛好廣泛，性格開朗，到中國某高中學習中文．該校流行音樂俱樂部正在招聘新成員，要求會某種樂器、嗓音好且有團隊意識．你希望加入該俱樂部．請用英文寫一封申請信，要點如下：
個人基本情況；
加入俱樂部的目的及滿足加入俱樂部的條件；
自己的聯(lián)系方式（電話：12345678；郵箱：tom101@hotmail．com）．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：不少于100；             2．可適當增加細節(jié)使行文連貫；
3．開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir/Madam，
POP CLUB attracts me deeply．I'm Tom，a senior 3 student from Australian．I have many interests，especially music．I am good at playing guitar．I also love singing popsongs and people tell me my voice sounds beautiful．In addition，I have a strong team spirit．I want to improve my spokenChinese by joining the club．When there is an activity，I will be more than happy to serve as the host，which，I believe，can strengthen my skills andimprove my abilities．What's more，I believe that I can make many Chinese friends there．
I would appreciate it if you can allow me to join the club soplease email me on tom101@hotmail．com or call me at 12345678．
Yours sincerely，
Tom．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一封申請信，申請加入校流行音樂俱樂部．寫作要點：1．個人基本情況；2．加入俱樂部的目的及滿足加入俱樂部的條件；3．自己的聯(lián)系方式（電話：12345678；郵箱：tom101@hotmail．com）．寫作時人稱以第一人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．重要短語：be good a doing sth （擅長做某事），sound beautiful（聽起來動聽），in addition（除…還），have a strong team spirit （有強烈的團隊精神），join the club（參加俱樂部），serve as （充當，作為），strengthen one's skills （增強某人的技能），improve one's abilities（增強某人的能力），allow sb to（允許某人做某事）．

【高分句型】
1．I will be more than happy to serve as the host，which，I believe，can strengthen my skills and improve my abilities．
這里是由which引導的非限制性定語，which在從句中作主語，指代前面整個主句的內(nèi)容，定語從句中"I believe"為插入語．
2．I would appreciate it if you can allow me to join the club so please email me on tom101@hotmail．com or call me at 12345678．
這里是由it作形式賓語，if you can allow me to join the club so please email me on tom101@hotmail．com or call me at 12345678作真正的賓語，常用結(jié)構(gòu)為"I appreciate/love/like/hate/dislike+it+if/when…"．

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
POP CLUB attracts me deeply．
I'm Tom，a senior 3 student from Australian．I have many interests，especially music．I am good at playing guitar．I also love singing popsongs and people tell me my voice sounds beautiful．（個人基本情況）
In addition，I have a strong team spirit．I want to improve my spoken Chinese by joining the club．When there is an activity，I will be more than happy toserve as the host，which，I believe，can strengthen my skills and improve my abilities．【高分句型】What's more，I believe that I can make many Chinese friends there．（加入俱樂部的目的及滿足加入俱樂部的條件）
I would appreciate it if you can allow me to join the club soplease email me on tom101@hotmail．com or call me at 12345678．【高分句型】（自己的聯(lián)系方式：電話、郵箱）
Yours sincerely，
Tom

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．