Question

假設學校即將舉行運動會，你將代表班級參賽。請參考下表中教練所制定的體能訓練項目和營養食譜寫一篇100字左右的英語短文對隊友們談談你的訓練計劃和你對參賽結果的預期。請注意勿在文中顯示真實校名。

Physical training	hours of training / increased strength-training exercise / lifting weights hours of sleep every night /8
Food	beef , meat and fish vegetables and fruit water and soft drinks
Your hopes	….

 
The school sports meet is coming soon.
 

Answer 1

One possible version：
The school sports meet is coming. I feel it so excited to compete in running for my class. Therefore, I have made a training schedule for myself.
First of all, hours of physical training should be increased to improve my speed. I will have some strength-training exercise such as lifting weights. Besides, it is necessary for me to have an eight hours’ sleep every night to stay energetic. As for food, beef, meat and fish are of great help. You’d better eat more vegetable as well as fruit which are rich in vitamins. I can drink water and soft drinks.
In a word, I’ll carry out the schedule as planned. I am sure to win a gold medal for my class.

試題分析：根據提示信息可以判斷文章應用一般現在時和將來時態，使用第一人稱。而且文章需包括三個方面內容，即介紹自己制定的體能訓練項目、介紹自己制定的營養食譜，最后提出自己的希望。寫作時要根據表中所列的信息進行適當發揮想象，以使文章內容豐滿。在希望方面可以發揮的想象是：希望隊友們嚴格按照要求進行訓練，希望大家在比賽中取得好成績等等。在寫作時要使用恰當的連接詞把提示信息有效連接起來，使文章語言通順流暢，上下文銜接緊湊。此外，在寫作時還要注意使用高級詞匯和多種句式表達，比如分詞短語，獨立主格等等。
【亮點說明】本篇范文短小精悍，結構緊湊，要點全面，語言通順流暢，時態人稱使用正確，很好的完成了寫作任務。在謀篇布局方面作者采用了經典的三段式，首先提出寫作目的，然后介紹自己的訓練計劃，最后表達了自己的希望，這種結構安排使文章脈絡清晰，一目了然。作者在文中還使用了therefore，first of all ，besides，as for，in a word等起連接作用的詞匯短語，使文章內容更具有層次感，避免了內容的雜亂無章。此外除了定語從句which are rich in vitamins.外，作者在文中大量運用短語，比如不定式短語to stay energetic.，介詞短語of great help，as well as等既增添了句式結構的變化，又給人一種清爽的感覺，使文章讀起來朗朗上口。