Question

假如你是李華，你的外國筆友Mark 想了解你校的近況。正好你校正在開展“提倡節約、反對浪費”的活動。 請根據下文的提示給Mark寫一封電子郵件。

★節約用紙，廢紙回收；

★節約用水，珍惜水源；

★節約用電，按時熄燈；

★節約用餐，不亂花錢。

注意：1．詞數100左右；

2．可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；

3．開頭和結尾已經寫好，不計入總數；

4．參考詞匯：launch vt. 開展； thrift n. 節儉。

Dear Mark,

I’m very glad you are so interested in our school. _______ _____

___________________________ ___________________________________ __

___________________________ ___________________________________ __

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Mark，

I’m very glad you are so interested in our school. recently our school is launching an activity to call for thrift and go against wasting. Every student is required to save paper, water, electricity and food. All waste paper must be collected and sold to help the poor students. Water must be made full use of and now you cannot find any tap that is left running without students around. And each student should get into a great habit of turning off the light on time. What’s more, all of us are called on not to use our pocket money to buy some things unnecessary and some students even use their saved money to help the students in need

Yours，

Li Hua

 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇話題類作文。假如你是李華，你的外國筆友Mark 想了解你校的近況。正好你校正在開展“提倡節約、反對浪費”的活動。 請根據下文的提示給Mark寫一封電子郵件。節約用紙，廢紙回收；節約用水，珍惜水源；節約用電，按時熄燈；節約用餐，不亂花錢。需要寫的內容已經粗略給出，需要我們翻譯成完整通順的句子，適當添加些內容，使文章更充實。寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，不能出現文章脫節問題。一定要給出自己的看法。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型為文章潤色。注意要求的詞數100詞左右，不要太多也不要太少。

亮點說明：

范文使用了一些重要的語法知識：Water must be made full use of and now you cannot find any tap that is left running without students around.這里含有一個定語從句；Water must be made full use of被動語態；語法知識使用得當，敘事清晰；

Water must be made full use of and now you cannot find any tap that is left running without students around.這里含有一個定語從句。

范文注意使用了現在進行時、一般現在時等不同的時態來敘述不同的事情，對時態有較好的把握；

范文注意使用副詞recently和連詞what’s more，使表達更加生動，使作文更有條理，做到了行文連貫。

范文使用了很多固定短語：call for, go against, make full use of, get into a habit of等，使作文內容更加充實。