Question

16．1．列舉游客的不文明行為（至少兩點）．
2．說明不文明行為的不良影響（至少兩點）；
3．對此，你的感想或建議．
注意：1．文章開頭結尾已經給出，但不計入總詞數；
  2．詞數：120詞左右；
3．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫．
參考詞匯：不文明的uncivilized
Dear editor，
Nowadays，many tourists behave badly in some scenic spots．Their uncivilized behaviors are presented in the following aspects．
Some travelers are unwilling to queue up for tickets for attractions or vehicles in the scenic regions because they always want to get benefit for themselves ahead of others．Some others even pick flowers or shake the trees to see the flowers falling down on purpose．Their behaviors destroy the beauty of nature as well as their own images seriously．
As for the behaviors mentioned above，I feel very angry about it．I suggest that the government or the travel departments should take tough measures to prevent the behaviors．For example，the people should be punished due to what they have done．
                                                               Yours，
                                                               Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是提綱作文，根據所給提示關于游客的不文明行為寫一篇短文．寫作要點：1．列舉游客的不文明行為（至少兩點）；2．說明不文明行為的不良影響（至少兩點）；3．對此，你的感想或建議．屬提綱作文．在寫作時人稱以第三人稱為主．時態以一般現在時為主．重要短語：behave badly （表現不好），be unwilling to （不愿意做某事），queue up（排隊），on purpose（故意地），as well as（和，又，也），as for （關于），take measures to do （采取措施做），due to（由于），ahead of（在…前面）．

解答 Dear editor，
 Nowadays，many tourists behave badly in some scenic spots．Their uncivilized behaviors are presented in the following aspects．
 Some travelers are unwilling to queue up for tickets for attractions or vehicles in the scenic regions because they always want to get benefit for themselves ahead of others．【高分句型】Some others even pick flowers or shake the trees to see the flowers falling down on purpose．（游客的不文明行為）Their behaviors destroy the beauty of nature as well as their own images seriously．（不文明行為的不良影響）
 As for the behaviors mentioned above，I feel very angry about it．I suggest that the government or the travel departments should take tough measures to prevent the behaviors．【高分句型】For example，the people should be punished due to what they have done．（感想或建議）

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．