Today is my father’s birthday. In the afternoon, after I finished my school class, I went shopping and bought a gift for him. Then I went home by subway and luckily I had a seat which was the only one left in the carriage. I sat there and imaged how happy my father would be when he saw the gift.
When the subway train arrived at the next station, an old lady with lots of bags in her hand got onto the bus and stood in front of me. Watching the old lady, I hesitated. After studying for a whole day and shopping for an hour, I felt really tired and was pleased to have a seat to rest on the way home. However, a voice from my heart told me, “You are young. You should give your seat to the old lady.” One minute later, I stood up and offered my seat to the old lady. She thanked me and praised me, which made me feel proud.
Although it took me a long time to get home by standing on the subway train, I felt very happy for what I did.
試題分析:這是一篇看圖寫作,一共四幅圖。做題時:1. 認真讀圖,可知三幅圖你給父親買完禮物后乘坐地鐵回家時經歷的一件事。2. 初步構思,考慮用詞、短語、句型和時態。3. 連詞成句,然后再連句成文。盡可能地充分利用所學的短語或句型來表述具體的內容。4. 反復審核,修改錯誤。5. 注意所給的漢語提示。一般說來,看圖寫話中的漢語提示往往給定了有關的時間、地點、人物等相關的信息,還有參考詞匯都是有用信息。
點評:在把握了文章的中心后,應在內心構思一個基本的框架,并考慮使用恰當的詞語、短語和句型,以充分地表達文章的內容。這是體現自身能力的重要一環。然后再將各圖的單個句子串連起來。串連時,要注意使用適當的連接詞語或過渡性語句,不至于讓讀者覺得文章中出現跳躍現象,更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。