Question

18．假如你是我市一名高三學生李華，你打算報考一所外語學院．你在網絡上看到上海外國語學院的招生信息（admission information），并對此非常感興趣．根據招生要求，你需要用英語撰寫一份個人申請報告，內容應包括：
    1．記述自己的個性特長及取得的成果；
    2．說明進入大學后的努力方向及設想等．
注意：1．詞數：120-150；開頭與結尾已經給出，不計人總詞數．
    2．可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．
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I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱類書面表達，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但不是很具體，考生要根據要點進行拓展發揮，不能有遺漏，內容一定要充實，這就要求增加了難度．在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次．同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，讓文章看起來很有條理、流暢．
重要短語：
surf the net 瀏覽網頁，get on well with和…相處好，communicate with sb與某人交流，intend to打算，major in主修，be admitted into被錄取．
高分句型：
1．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．這句話用了省略句，
2．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．這句話用了過去分詞做定語delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on修飾speeches．
3．As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．這句話用了as引導的非限制性定語從句，so引導的結果狀語從句，在這一從句中又包含一個if引導的條件狀語從句．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I'm writing to apply to study in your university．I read about the admission information while surfing the net the other day．I'm really interested in it．（高分句型）（寫作意圖）
I'm an outgoing girl and I can get on well with all my classmates．I do well in most of my subjects，especially in English．I like reading English poems and enjoy English movies．Speeches delivered by famous people like Martin Luther．King，President Bush and so on，are also my favorite．（高分句型）I once won the first prize for English Speech Contest held in our city and was honored the Best Speaker for my excellence performances．（自我介紹）
As we all know，English is a universal language and I like to communicate with different people，so I intend to major in English if I am admitted into your university．（高分句型）
I want to have a job relating with languages in the future and I believe I can help promote cultural communication between China and the world．（入學后的打算）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 本文屬于應用文中的申請報告，范文中包含申請項目、具備條件、懇請申請單位考慮自己的申請，表示謝意，期盼回復等；寫作過程中語言言簡意賅，語氣誠懇禮貌，避免了浮華、夸張的辭藻，靈活運用了一些高級詞匯和固定短語準確表述，合理的使用過渡語和連接詞，使得整篇文章過度自然，銜接緊密．