Question

【題目】假設你是李華，五一節放假期間你和爸媽一起到杭州旅游。請根據圖示，寫一篇游記。

參考詞匯：Leifeng Temple雷峰塔；preserve保護。

要求：1、適當增加細節，使文章流暢；

2、注意卷面整潔，書寫工整；

3、字數為110詞左右。

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Answer 1

【答案】My parents and I had a great trip to Hangzhou during the Labor Day holiday, which was full of surprises.

Our first delight on our first day was going to the West Lake. The lake was clear, reflecting the sky like an amazingly drawn painting. In the far distance stood the Leifeng Temple, which had remained standing for hundreds of years. Then followed a tour of China National Tea Museum, where we learned the history of tea making.

The second day, we drove to Xixi Wetland Park. What surprised us most was that people are doing a great deal to preserve the wetland. There, we saw lots of birds and plants that couldn’t be found anywhere else. The park was so big that at one time we thought we were lost. The day ended wonderfully.

All in all, the trip was fun and even educational. We all enjoyed it.

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于記敘文，要求寫一篇游記。

第一步：審題

體裁：記敘文

時態：根據提示，時態應為一般現在時和一般將來時。

結構：總分總法，分為四段：第一段引出描寫五一假期旅游；第二段描寫西湖和博物館；第三段描寫西溪鳥類濕地；第四段描寫感想并總結。

要求： 1、適當增加細節，使文章流暢；2、注意卷面整潔，書寫工整；3、字數為110詞左右。

第二步：列提綱 （重點詞組）

the Labor Day holiday；be full of；delight；be going to；the West Lake；drawn painting；the Leifeng Temple；hundreds of；China National Tea Museum；Xixi Wetland Park；a great deal；so… that…；all in all等。

第三步：連詞成句

1. My parents and I had a great trip to Hangzhou during the Labor Day holiday, which was full of surprises.

2. The lake was clear, reflecting the sky like an amazingly drawn painting.

3. In the far distance stood the Leifeng Temple, which had remained standing for hundreds of years.

4. Then followed a tour of China National Tea Museum, where we learned the history of tea making.

5. What surprised us most was that people are doing a great deal to preserve the wetland.等。

根據提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

本文用了and；Then；All in all等關聯詞。

連句成文，注意使用恰當的連詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改