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10．母愛情深，母愛無價．學會感恩，學會回報．某英語網站舉辦以"My mother"為主題的英語征文活動．請你根據下面表格提供的信息，寫一篇短文．
提示：1．短文應包括表格中的全部信息，條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明．
2．短文中不能出現真實的人名和地名．
3．詞數90詞左右，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數．

寫作要點寫作要點 3	1．介紹自己的母親，信息包括年齡、外貌特征、工作、特長、興趣和愛好．
	2．描述母親為自己做了什么以及自己的感受．
	3．你將做什么來回報母愛．

My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．．（介紹年齡外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（媽媽為我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（將來我要做什么回報）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文，短文的開頭已經給出．寫作內容應該包括：1．母親的有關信息（年齡、外貌、工作、特長、興趣和愛好）．2．母親為我做的一件事或幾件事以及我的感受．3．以后怎么來回報母愛．當描述母親為我做的事的時候，時態要用一般過去時，描述母親的信息時時態要用一般現在時，以后如何去回報母親，應該用一般將來時態，用第三人稱及第一人稱．重點短語及句型She is a woman of medium build with long black hair，She bought whatever I needed for my study，When I grow up，I will …等等

解答 答案：My Mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．（介紹年齡外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（媽媽為我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（將來我要做什么回報）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．

點評 這是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經給出．本作文中給出的要點比較簡略，動筆前先要圍繞這些要點阻止材料，確定寫作內容，注意將這些要點全部表達出來，不要偏離文章中心．寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，一定要契合文章要表達的主題，不能出現文章脫節問題．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．