Question

11．學生綜合素質評價的方式多種多樣，同伴互評是其中較為有效的方式之一，它可以讓學生不斷體驗成長和學習過程中的進步，并正確認識自我，保持自信．
某班一個小組正在進行階段性同伴互評活動，如果你是該組組長，請結合本組討論情況，為本組某位同學寫一份分激勵性評價報告，內容須包含以下要點：
•the skill/the advantage/the personal quality the student has
•one thing the student did
•some advice for the student
要求：（1）詞數80詞左右；
（2）不得出現真實的人名、校名．
Han Mei is an easygoing girl who gets along well with everyone．She is also talented in performing．What's the most important，she is warm-hearted．
Once she knew a girl in her neighborhood had so serious an illness that a large amount of money was needed．She put forward a suggestion calling on all the kids to give away pocket money to the unlucky girl．Besides，she organized a charity show to raise more money．When the girl and her parents got the money，they were really moved．
Han Mei should also put more time and energy into study and try to be a student with both a kind heart and good grades．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇給出寫作要點的提綱類作文．內容為根據以下提示，為本組某位同學寫一份激勵性評價報告．時態為一般現在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第三人稱．寫作要點包括：1．the skill/the advantage/the personal quality the student has；2．one thing the student did；3．some advice for the student．
常用到的重點短語和句型：get along well with與…相處的好
so…that 如此…以至于
give away 捐贈
besides 另外
try to do sth 盡力做某事等．

解答 Han Mei is an easygoing girl who gets along well with everyone．She is also talented in performing．What's the most important，she is warm-hearted．（高分句型）（韓梅的性格優點）
Once she knew a girl in her neighborhood had so serious an illness that a large amount of  money was needed．（高分句型）She put forward a suggestion calling on all the kids to give away pocket money to the unlucky girl．Besides，she organized a charity show to raise more money．When the girl and her parents got the money，they were really moved．（韓梅做過的一件事）
Han Mei should also put more time and energy into study and try to be a student with both a kind heart and good grades．（建議）

點評 這是一篇給出寫作要點的提綱類作文．該作文為考生提供了題目與一個簡單的寫作提綱，將考生的寫作控制在一定范疇．它要求考生緊扣題目主題，并根據提綱提示的思路和要點展開段落．考生在審題上一般不會出現障礙，在組織作文時注意所列要點需全部包括在作文中，注意句子的主謂賓格式，而不是簡單的材料要點的堆砌．