Question

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假如你是班長，學期結束時你要給同學作簡短的評價。你班的李華這個學期變化很大，請你根據提示寫一篇簡評。

過去	功課不好，常與同學爭吵，垃圾被他撒的滿地都是，課桌總是一團糟。
現在	自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化。（學習、與同學相處、生活……）
結果	父母、老師對他很滿意。
希望	在即將到來的考試中取得好成績。

 

注意：

短文須包括所有內容要點，要求語句通順、意思連貫；

括號部分須用3、4句話展開合理想象，作適當發揮；

詞數80個左右，短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Li Hua has improved a lot this term. In the past he didn’t do well in his subjects. He often quarreled with his classmates. Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him. His desk was always in a mess. He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him. Now he works hard at his lessons. He gets along well with his classmates. He often sweeps the floor. His parents and teachers are satisfied with him. I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam. (82 words)

【解析】

試題分析：本題要求寫一篇給同學作的評價。本文所給材料比較詳細。寫作中注意將李華過去和現在的一些情況介紹清楚，并描述自己對他將來的希望。結合材料可知本文時態人稱問題比較復雜，涉及過去，現在和將來三種時態，注意時態與時間狀語的搭配問題及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意使用連詞，序數詞，做到上下文聯系緊密，符合邏輯關系。最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯誤，寫好后反復讀幾遍，適當修改。

考點：提綱類作文

點評：此類作文首先要做的就是認真閱讀材料，不能跑題偏題。寫作中注意一些基礎的寫作常識，不犯低級錯誤。只要平時積累足夠，就一定能獲得滿意的分數。另外為了應付考試，可以有選擇的背誦一些范文，這樣應考時就會有法可依。