Question

14．初中的學習生活即將結束了，你如何評價自己的表現呢？請根據所給提示，為主題為"我眼中的自己"的班會寫一篇發言稿．
提示：1．自我肯定：在家里、在學校…
2．應改進之處：不太關心他人、不愛勞動、浪費…
3．努力方向：…
要求：1．根據所提示的內容，可適當發揮想象；
2．文中不得出現真實的人名、校名和地名；
3．語句通順，意思連貫，語法正確，書寫規范；
4．詞數：60-80．文章開頭以給出，不計入總詞數．
Hello，everyone!I'm glad to have a chance to say something about myself．In my eyes，I'm a good student．
When Iam at schooI，Ithink Iam a good student．Not only can I do every schoolwork before the schedule，but also I can get good grades in the most of the exams．Iam also a good child in my parents'eyes because I can communicate well with my parents and get along well with them．However，I still have some bad behaviors that made me not perfect enough．For example，Idonot always care what others'feelings and I don't like doing some cleaning．I also know that I don't take good care of the things I have and waste them．
During these three years，I have learnt many things．I think I should become a good teenager that not only good in my study，but also can behave well in my daily life．．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：I am also a good child in my parents'eyes because I can communicate well with my parents and get along well with them在我父母的眼中，我也是一個好孩子，因為我可以很好地與父母溝通，并與他們相處得很好．這是由because引導的原因狀語從句；communicate well with sb．與某人很好交流；get along well with sb．與某人相處很好．
高分句型二：However，I still have some bad behaviors that made me not perfect enough而，我仍然有一些壞的行為，使我不夠完美．However然而，表轉折；后面是由that引導的定語從句，先行詞是bad behaviors，在定語從句中充當主語，故不能省略．

解答 When I am at schooI，I think I am a good student．Not only can I do every schoolwork before the schedule，but also I can get good grades in the most of the exams．I am also a good child in my parents'eyes because I can communicate well with my parents and get along well with them．（高分句型一）（自我肯定） However，I still have some bad behaviors that made me not perfect enough．（高分句型二） For example，I do not always care what others'feelings and I don't like doing some cleaning．I also know that I don't take good care of the things I have and waste them．（存在的問題）
    During these three years，I have learnt many things．I think I should become a good teenager that not only good in my study，but also can behave well in my daily life．（努力的方向）

點評 （1）句型多樣化，不要I（We）…到底，使人覺得乏味．（2）適當使用一些并列句或主從復合句．（3）進一步描繪人或事物時，適當使用定語從句．（4）適當使用分詞或分詞短語，烘托謂語動詞．（5）偶爾使用一下倒裝句，增加新鮮感．