Question

15．未來很美好，你長大以后打算做什么？廚師、記者、藝術家…描述一個你夢想的職業．
提示：
1．短文應含思維導圖中相關的要點，條理清楚，行文連貫．
2．短文中不能出現真實的人名和地名；
3．詞數不少于80，短文開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
When I grow up，I'm going to be a singer．當我長大后，我要成為一名歌手．   這是when引導的時間狀語從句，當…時候．
高分句型二
 I hope my dream can come true．我希望我的夢想成真．這是一個賓語從句，I hope是主句，后面的是賓語從句．

解答 When I grow up，I'm going to be a singer．【高分句型一，注意時間狀語從句的使用】【開篇點明主題】I love music and I'm good at singing．I want to be a singer like Lady Gaga．I can sing beautiful songs for people and make them happy．And also I can make much money．Then I can buy a beautiful house with a garden for my parents because they do so much for me．
To realize my dream，first，I'm going to join the singing club and practice singing as often as possible．Second，I'm going to be a student at a music school．At last，I'm going to take part in some singing competition to improve myself．【正文部分詳細介紹為什么要做歌手以及如何為實現理想而努力】I hope my dream can come true．
【高分句型二，注意賓語從句的使用】．【結尾緊扣主題】

點評 動筆前應先認真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內容，確定主要短語，句式等問題．注意不要遺漏要點，句子要通順連貫，沒有語法錯誤．